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Post by trainer on Jan 5, 2005 21:07:05 GMT -5
Chapter 1
Some Ghosts are friendly
Richie, a young boy training to become a pokemon trainer was very excited to arrive in his home town in New Bark Town.
Morty was Training him as his aprentice. Now they were driving from the city of Ecruteak as Stantler and other pokemon that apeared at night passed.
"So Richie.."Morty started to say."Are you happy returning to your home town after all that training?"
Richie yawned and rubbed his eyes."Yeah...I wanna see my mom and dad again.."Richie said as he noticed the starry night sky.
"I've received a phone call from Prof. Rose that there is going to be a special suprise when we get there."Morty said.
It was years later into the future.Prof. Elm no longer works for the New Bark Town lab.He fills in at Pallet town's lab.Morty still works for gym leader in Ecruteak, he was just old...really old.
Prof. Rose had always wanted to be a proffesor before.Richie had shiny blue eyes that would have been the first thing you would see of him if you happened to meet him somewhere.
He was wearing light orange shorts with a dark green shirt that read: Pokemon Master.He was not a pokemon master..at least yet.
Richie started to close his eyes.Then he fell asleep."Richie wake up we're here!"Morty said.Richie rubbed his eyes and yawned.
Richie jumped out of the jeep and looked around.He walked over to Prof. Rose's(remember?)lab.Richie ran over to a rectangular table with three pokeballs on it.
Prof. Rose walked into the room with a smile and said."Hello Richie.As planned we do have a suprise.Any way...the starters you can pick are Cyndiquale, Totodile and Chikorita."
"What's the suprise?"Richie asked."I will give it to you when you have picked your starter.If you have studied enough you know that the middle one is-"
"I choose Totodile!"Richie said as he grabbed the middle pokeball."Not so fast."Prof. Rose said as she gave Richie an egg."Your not leaving without your suprise so here it is."
Richie had got an egg as his suprise.A pokemon egg to be exact.
Prof. Rose had a white lab coat and light saphire eyes with orange hair."I got food for a suprise?I was kinda hungry."
"That's not it!"Prof. Rose said."It's a pokemon egg.When it hatches the pokemon inside will be yours."Then suddenly the egg started to hatch...and out came a Gastly."Gastly gast!"It was a baby Gastly.
"Now your suprise is another pokemon.Here is your pokedex and your five pokeballs.And one potion to heal your pokemon and a berry too."
Richie packed all of these items into his backpack."Okay.Thanks Prof. Rose!"Richie started to run out of the lab but his arch rival and best friend knocked him over."So you got a pokemon?Hey it's Richie!Long-time-no-see!"
It was Jason.The number one pokemon brag-a-lot master...well that's what Richie called him."Hey Jason."
Jason noticed the Gastly floating around and yelled."It's a ghost!Let's get out of here!"Jason scurried into a corner of the lab.
"Jason it's a baby gastly.It's a pokemon.It's friendly too.Wanna see?"
Jason came over and patted Gastly on the head.Gastly licked Jason on the hand."I'm poisoned!I'm poisoned!"Jason cried.
Jason was okay.He was being the scrardest man alive.But in this case: scardest boy alive."Your just scared of a baby gastly."Richie said as he walked out of the lab.
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Post by Nightjirachi on Jan 6, 2005 10:21:42 GMT -5
A cool story, but sometimes you can change the subject in a paragraph, like you said this:
See what I mean?
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Post by trainer on Jan 7, 2005 22:06:04 GMT -5
Cool.
Chapter 2
A tower to honor bellesprout and Falkner
Jason had chosen Cyndiquale as his very first pokemon.He had a big smile on his face and he was carrying it in his hands proudly.
Richie slapped his hand in his face and said."Whatever happens let's hope he doesn't brag."However Jason started bragging.
"I'm the best!"He chanted"No one can beat me!Ha ha!"He bragged so much he never noticed the bully that had haunted the friends every day.
"Hey punk!"It was Dennis.The red shaggy haired,shiny brown eye bully with a big nose was looking straight down at Jason.
"I got a pokemon at the lab too."He said."So when I pound you...that means I beat you in a pokemon battle!"
Richie pulled out a pokeball from his pocket."Don't count on it, bub."Richie said.Dennis was stomping his feet on the ground and finaly yelled.
"WHAT!?What did you say to me!?Go, Chikorita!"Richie threw his pokeball and called."Go, Totodile!"
Dennis thought then said."A water type?This will be easy like a video game!"
Richie made a face and circled a finger around his right ear.This meant that he thought that Dennis was stupid.
"Hey I saw that!Use Solar Beam!"Chikorita didn't know what Dennis was talking about.The Chikorita didn't know a singal grass type move yet.
"I said do it!"Dennis cried.But Chikorita didn't know the Solarbeam attack.Dennis was just to dumb to know.
Now you were supposed to study before you got your first pokemon.And Dennis was a person who didn't study.
Jason then started to make fun of Dennis."Dennis..the Idiotic pokemon.This pokemon mentaly stupid.So don't think of catching this or bad luck for you."
Richie and Jason walked out of New Bark Town and watching Dennis make a fool of himself.
Then the moms of Richie and Jason quickly gave the friends an item they will need."Sorry, honey.I forgot about your pokegear."
Richie's mom said."Here's your pokegear, son.Your lucky I didn't for get about this important item of yours."
Richie and Jason walked out of the their home town when suddenly a Pidgy attacked."A wild pokemon!I'll catch it!"
Richie said."Go Totodile!"Totodile apeared from the pokeball and started dancing.
"Toto toto dile!To toto toto dile!"Totodile started to sing."Totodile use scratch attack!"
Totodile obeyed.The wild Pidgy tried to escape but it was hit in the back.The wild Pidgy cried in pain.
"Go pokeball!"The pokeball rolled once....twice....three times then stopped moving.
"Yay!I caught a pidgy!"Suddenly a sage apeared and said to Richie."I sence you own a Gastly.Use it now."
Richie popped open his pokeball and out came a Gastly.The sage started to hum a strange tune and then suddenly the group of friends were in a different city.
"Welcome to Violet City.I helped out your Gastly gain the teleport move.With it I teleported you here."Richie and Jason looked around at the new city they were in.
"Go to the Sprout Tower.The answer is there."Richie and Jason nodded but then the sage dissapeared leaing nothing.
Richie and Jason looked forword and they could see a building with a giant painting of a Bellsprout on it."I'm guessing that's the Sprout Tower the old man was talking about."
Richie finaly said.Richie and Jason scurried over to the large building.There was a figure in front of the entrance."My name is Ricky."The figure said.
"I guard the entrance from anyone who doesn't own a Gastly.Wait..you own a Gastly."Richie gasped.
"H..How did you know?"A slight breeze whizzed by."Trust me...I know the smell of Gastly.And the guy following you.He can't come in unless he's with you.
Ricky said."He's with me."Ricky had dark green hair with dark blue eyes.He wore a red hat that seemed to get in his eyes.
"If you didn't have a Gastly I would've let you in anyway because people without Gastlys take the Tower Test."Richie guessed that the Tower test was battling trainers all through the building.
Ricky walked the two friends to an elevator.Soon enough they were at the top.There was a man with blue hair and dark blue eyes waiting in front of th elevator.
"Hello my name is Falkner.I am gym leader here.I was also gym leader here years ago.But please I have to get back to the gym."Ricky,Richie and Jason stepped out of the elevator just as Falkner stepped in.
There was an old man in sight.Ricky went up to him and told him something.The old man came up to Richie and said."Hello.I am the Elder here at Sprout Tower."
The Elder said."This tower was made for honoring the pokemon called Bellsprout.But before I ask your name we will battle."
The Elder and Richie stepped into a bigger area and the Elder said."I feel younger now battling with you.If you win I shall give you my Flash HM."
Who will win?The Elder or Richie?Find out in the next chapter: An HM that gives light and battle for the badge.
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Post by Nightjirachi on Jan 8, 2005 5:25:19 GMT -5
Nice chapter, but there's bits I don't get.
You've done this twice. You've gone onto a new line when you need to carry the sentence on. Here's a better way to put it:
'Richie and Jason walked out of the their home town when suddenly a Pidgy attacked."A wild pokemon!I'll catch it!" Richie said."Go Totodile!"Totodile apeared from the pokeball and started dancing.'
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Post by trainer on Jan 14, 2005 21:27:13 GMT -5
Chapter 3
An HM that gives light and Battle for the badge!
"Go Totodile!"Richie called.Totodile did a little battle dance."Hoothoot!Go!"The Elder called.
The Hoothoot seemed very speedy from the way it started dancing around in circles.
"Totodile be carefull about this pokemon!Don't judge it by it's apearance!"Totodile nodded as he got ready for battle.
The Elder then called."Two pokemon only!Understood?"Richie nodded and wondered why the Elder didn't say his sentence at the begginging of the battle.
"Totodile use a Rage attack!"Totodile nodded and started speeding towards the opponent.
Totodile was about to hit it when suddenly."Hoothoot use Double Team!"The Hoothoot obeyed and used the attack he was commanded to do.
Two more Hoothoots seemed to apear out of nowhere.Totodile attacked the left one but ot failed."Totodile consentrate on the real one!"Richie commanded.
Totodile did what he was told and closed his eyes.He could hear the sound of the real one.Then suddenly Totodile attacked the middle Hoothoot which tried to move away but it was knocked out on contact.
"You are a truly skilled trainer but you haven't battled my other pokemon!Go Bellsprout!"The Elder said.A Bellsprout apeared in the battle.
"Totodile use Rage!Consentrate first!"Totodile obeyed.Then Totodile made a correct hit on contact.
The Bellsprout was almost fainted."A Scratch attack should do it!"Totodile nodded and used the chosen attack.
The Bellsprout was dizzy at the moment then suddenly was hit."I win!"Totodile did his little victory dance.
"You are very skilled indeed.As promised here is your Flash HM."Gastly then came out of nowhere and teleported Richie and Jason right in front of the gym.
"What just happened?"Jason asked.Richie was confused how Gastly came out of its pokemon by its own.
"Anyway we're at the gym.Better go inside."Inside the gym Falkner was standing at the far back of the room.
"I knew you would come."Falkner said as he noticed the two boys walking in."I came for the badge!"
Falkner tossed a pokeball into the battle arena."Pidgy, Go."He said calmly.
"Go Gastly!"Richie tossed a pokeball containing the pokemon: Gastly.Richie smiled and Falkner grinned.
Who will win the battle?Find out in the next chapter: And the winner is..a...cute little Gastly?
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Post by Nightjirachi on Jan 15, 2005 5:16:38 GMT -5
cool chapter, but:
1) Could it be longer?
2) At the bottom, you put this:
The title gives the next chapter away.
3) You've put this:
This story is not the games. In the anime, somebody doesn't say sentences like in the games.
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Post by trainer on Feb 12, 2005 9:51:05 GMT -5
Chapter 4
What the heck is a Spearyotto?
"Totodile use rage!"Richie commanded.Totodile obeyed and blew out a powerful water blast."That's not what I expected."Falkner said.
Pidgy started to fly away but then suddenly it was hit."Right on target!"Richie said."Pidgy use gust".PIdgy sent out a little tornado as Totodile tried to run away.But Totodile was hit.
Totodile was badly hurt but Richie didn't give up."Use rage Totodile!"Totodile started running then it used a more powerful blast of water.The Pidgy tried to run but it was hit right away and it fainted.
"That wasn't even the challenge.Go Spearyotto!"Falkner saidTotodile wondered what this pokemon looked like as the red glow that released from the pokeball started to go clearer and clearer.
"What's that!?"Richie asked.Then the pokemon became clear.It was some kind of fusion of a Pidgeotto and a Spearow.Falkner then answered."It's a fusion pokemon.Now if we want a fusion of a pokemon we go to a pokemon center and go to the D.N.A. mixer to get a fusion pokemon.They can't be caught in the wild."
Then it all seemed clear to Richie."Totodile you can't let that thing scare you!Use a rage attack!"Totodile nodded and went running fast then it punched the fusion pokemon as it tried to get away.
The Spearyotto was baddly hit.It didn't look like it can take more."Use it two more times Totodile!"Totodile obeyed and went running into the fusion pokemon with a powerful punch and this was repeated one more time.
"Spearyotto fainted?!"Falkner shouted.Spearyotto lay on the floor fainted as Richie said."I kept on using rage so it would get stronger.Everyone knows that."Falkner stuck out his hand."Here.Take the badge.And this TM.And as a special bonus you can have some Pidgeotto D.N.A."
Richie took the items from Falkner's hand and packed them in his backpack."I have one question."Richie said."What's that?"Falkner repyed."How do you make fusion pokemon?"
Falkner walked toward the exit of his gym and said."I'll show you."Falkner walked out of the gym with Richie tagging along and they went right into the pokemon center."That's a big machine."
Falkner went up to a desk and talked to the Nurse Joy.As he walked back to Richie he said."I got you regisered to use the fusion machine.You got Mareep D.N.A. as a special gift."
Richie grabbed the Mareep D.N.A. and took out his Pidgeotto D.N.A. and walked up to the machine."How do I work this thing?"Richie asked.Falkner walked up and said."You insert the D.N.A. right here."Falkner answered.
Richie put the D.N.A. in the little slots that looked like the D.N.A. would fit."I guess I press this button that says mix."Richie said as he pressed the button.Then suddenly a small tube next to the machine started to glow.
"Richie, pokemon D.N.A. is something you can use over and over.And to make D.N.A. you must take a hair or skin cell off the pokemon you want."The tube open and revealed a fusion of a Mareep and a Pidgeotto.
"This is cool!"Richie said as he picked up the pokemon."Wait!Not all pokemon like to be grabbed when their first fusions!"But it was too late.Richie had already picked up the pokemon."It's so cute!"Richie said.
Then the fusion electricuted Richie."Since it's a Mareotto I will just nick name it sparky."
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Post by Nightjirachi on Feb 16, 2005 5:07:33 GMT -5
Great chapter, fusion pokemon sound cool! How about members tell you 2 pokemon that you can get the DNA of and you fuse them?
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Post by trainer on Feb 16, 2005 19:41:11 GMT -5
Sounds fun.And if they can't I have some ideas.
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